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Chapter 1: I Set Fire To The Rain(part 1)

Unknown POV:

       The rain heavily hits the ground in front of me scattering mud all around and making my way out of the forest even harder.I really do not know where I'm going and the forest seems to stretch constantly...The trees seem to stretch their branches, as if trying to catch me...I don't know how I can continue ... I don't know if I can continue...I'm falling unconscious... I think I'll pass out soon.

       My clothes are soaking wet and stained with ... blood? Is that blood?I can't tell right now.And my hair is dirty and full of blood...And I am pretty sure so is my face.I have some scratches deep on my hands and there's a piece of barbed wire hanging from my pants.Where did I got this?Did I jumped over a fence?Why?it hurts so bad...It's too cold...I-...I think I'm going to fall, my knees gave up keeping me on my feet and I think my ankles are feeling numb...I'm going to die frozen,aren't I?

       I hit the ground with a loud 'Thud' that echoed through the nearby forest.I-I think I hear sirens driving away from me.Good. Now nobody will find me here...I think the rain has slowed down a bit but I can still feel it hitting me pretty hard.I tried to get up but my limbs feel very heavy.'This is my grave.'

       I felt something warm dripping on my cheek and tears started to stream from my eyes.My breathing began to slow down slightly as I felt a warm feeling began to fill my whole body.So this is what death feels like.I closed my eyes trying to enjoy my last few heartbeats.It was pretty quiet around, I could hear the rain hitting the ground and the trees leaves, the wind blowing coldly and some ...rustling?Whatever makes that sound is dangerously close, and is approaching me very fast...

       I passed out.

Slenderman's POV:

       I approached carefully the helpless creature that was trembling on the cold ground.In front of me was lying down a male human that looked pretty young in my opinion.He looked quite pale and cold,his eyes are covered with his (H/C) bangs but I can still tell if his eyes are closed or not.

       I crept a little closer as the human started whimpering and murmuring something impossible to understand.I gasped silently while I grabbed him by the shoulder and turned him slightly.All his clothes were dirty and bloodstained but what shocked me the most was that fact that the blood wasn't his at all.

       In my attempt to lift him up he clung desperately to my jacket trying to warm himself up.Warping slowly my tendrils around his waist I picked the poor boy up and began slowly to walk to the mansion.I think I am a little attached to this human.

      'An extra helping hand would never be bad, would it ?'

I've noticed how popular these "x Male!Reader' got, and I decided to give it a try by myself!
Warning lame Fic is lame, sorry.
All I have to say is that this is not my best and is awfully short for my liking.
So...What do you think? Should I write more ?

:iconbiggrinfaceplz: I.Regret.NOTHING.
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AliceIsAwesome1 Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Hi! I clicked on this story because I recently got into the creepypasta fandom, and I have to say this is a great start! I see that there is more parts and I am going to read them.

But first, I'd like to give a pointer. I see a lot of grammar mistakes and sentences that could have been written so it could make more sense and basically flow better. I find that it helps to have a proof reader and to read it out loud to yourself.
Take this sentence as an example: "I approached carefully the helpless creature that was trembling on the cold ground."
To me it seems that it would sound better if written similar to, "I carefully approached the helpless creature that was trembling on the cold ground."

I am no trying to come off rude or mean, so I am sorry if I did. I'm just trying to give some tips to fellow writers.
As stated before, I really liked this start. So sorry for this little rant. >.<
CelesteBlood Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Sweetie you're not mean at all! You have no reason to be sorry. ;A;

And, to be honest, I was planning to rewrite the entire series after it's done. I'm aware of the grammar mistakes and bad mode of expression, but they're just temporary.

I also want to thank you for the advice, that shows me how much you care. And don't worry, I'm always open to Constructive

Criticism. (#^.^#)
AliceIsAwesome1 Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, whew.

And I really do love this series.
CelesteBlood Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
I'm really glad you do.
CrownedFact Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
CelesteBlood Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I am? (^.^'')
wonderlei Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  Student General Artist
So cute and fluffy :)
CelesteBlood Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank You (?)
ChaoticMercy1 Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  New member
I've been reading some of these and i've got to ask, what's creepypasta?
slendrgurl Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  New member
(reads more fanfiction) (looks in comments below) screams,AHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! THIS PERSON DOESN'T KNOW WHAT CREEPYPASTA IS!!!!?!?!??!? ( picks up laptop and throws at wall smashing it) O.O whoops...
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